Elizabeth “Daisy” from How I Live Now
Just Listen to the Way I Live Now
After getting arrested for the incident with William Cash, Will lied saying to the court that Owen had broken into his house stealing merchandise and creating thousands of dollars worth of damage. Owen was then sent to England to attend an anger management bootcamp which will occur over a 3 year period.
Before boarding the plane, Owen swept a gentle kiss upon Annabels lips, both of them tearing...saying their last goodbyes. It was then time to board the plane. While on the plane, Owen was cherishing the last good-byes from Annabel, his girl friend, when suddenly red lights flashed, people screamed at the top of their lungs. Looking out the window he realized they were in the middle of a storm...crash landing. In England. How fun.
When the plane stopped falling, finally meeting the rugged Earth, It was silent. As the dust cleared he could see no survivors besides himself. Owen then unstrapped the seat belts locating a long bruise across his abdomen. So much for the protection of seatbelts.
Exiting the plane was quite an adventure. Creeping across the still, cold, lifeless bodies. A cold sickening shrill crawled up his back giving him an uneasy feeling. The plane had landed in a, what looks like, the remainder of a field. With smog in the sky, and a thick, fog that yearned to hug your lungs until you could no longer breathe how inviting.
Owen wandered around the back woods for what seemed like eternity seeking a form of human life. Nothing. Just a faint scratchy warning from a black crow in the distance. Walking and walking endlessly can get pretty boring, especially when your alone in what seems like a graveyard.
After walking for about two hours, give or take, he spotted a house in the distance. With is heart pumping, beating rapidly, he ran as fast as he could up the dry hill. When he finally approached the house there was a guy sitting in a chair in the lawn. He slowly approached this man and asked where he was.
No response.
Helloooo? Owen said ticked off.
Just as Owen was losing faith in this man, a girl crossed through the lawn. She smiled and invited him in for some tea and again Owen asked, “Where am I?”
She smiled and said, “Welcome to England.”
He then found out her age, name and learned a little bit about the guy in the yard. She said his name was Edmond and that he was still in shock for the recent bombing. Observing Daisy more closely Owen noticed that she was so familiar in many ways. The way she walked, the way she talked, her body language...Everything.
Owen then realized that she was exactly like Annabel.
“Daisy...” Owen asked, “You remind me of a really close friend back home...”
She looked at him.
“I really miss her and I was wondering if you could show me the way to the airport...”
Daisy looked at him with a cold stare.
“Why Owen, I’m afraid that isn’t possible...”
Owen was puzzled.
“All airports have been closed due to the recent bombings. I’m really sorry...”
Irritated, Owen said his “Thank you’s“ and started on his way.
“Wait!” yelled an unfamiliar girl, “I’ll take you there.”
Owen got into her car and they were on their way to the airport. Finally. The trip was about an hour long. They laughed and shared some stories, when Piper explained about Edmond and the war he looked down.
Piper then stated, “Oh by the way...”
Owen looked suspiciously at her.
“In order to get on that plane, you need to get past the guards.”
“No problem.” he said, completely unaware of the amount of security.
Piper dropped Owen off in the near woods by the airport and left without question. Owen slipped on to the airport grounds and into the back of a newly painted, forest green, armoured up Hummer. How Nice.
Quickly ripping open bags of equipment and clothing, he found a slightly used, semi-baggy uniform. Slipping it on and grabbing some ammunition he ran as fast as he could, zipping up his pants trying to express he was late for boarding. Since Owen was slightly taller and had larger muscles than an average 17 year old, it was fairly easy to pass himself as a military boeuf. As quick as possible, he boarded the plane and found a seat near the window in the far back right corner.
Annabel Here I Come, he thought.
Owen dozed off dreaming of the reactions from friends and family upon his return.
1.I thought this story was really cool and mysterical. I thought that man outside the house was weird. And i wondered who he was and why he didn't talk. o.o I visualized the story thoughout the whole thing. It reminded me of the movie "Knight and Day" with Tom Cruise, idk why. Maybe because of the plane crash and the love story behind it.
ReplyDelete2.The best discription of the setting would probably be "With smog in the sky, and a thick, fog that yearned to hug your lungs until you could no longer breathe how inviting." I could visualize the thick fog and it being creppy. I could almost sence how it would have felt like. Cold, fog in your lungs.
3.The conversation was great. I liked the dialog of that mysterious man. :p (which was nothing lol)
4. I didn't find any mistakes, except maybe when you said 'how nice" or "how inviting" there should a comma in front of it? idk. Its probably fine xD Good job!:0
1. I thought it was really good. I could visualize what was happening in the story because i also read How I Live Now. The story made me think about the book How I Live Now and all the things that happened in the book.
ReplyDelete2. "Creeping across the still, cold, lifeless bodies. A cold sickening shrill crawled up his back giving him an uneasy feeling. The plane had landed in a, what looks like, the remainder of a field. With smog in the sky, and a thick, fog that yearned to hug your lungs until you could no longer breathe how inviting." I thought this was a really good description and described what he was seeing and experiencing really well.
3. The conversation that Owen and Daisy had was very real and natural.
4. I didn't find any mistakes in your story it was really good. Good Job!!!
I loved your story Marrie!!!, it was really well thought out and very detailed. i felt like had read both those stories particially from this. i didn't find any mistakes what you wrote was wonderful. The dialic was wonderful. Bravo, luv!
ReplyDeleteIt felt awesome reading this, it felt like you could really see what was happening in the story with all the detail you put in. I remember how he got on the plain saying goodbye to his girlfriend and how suddenly there was a storm. The images i saw was how he got of the plain and when he saw a man that didn't answer him. The concepts or ideas that are in my head was that you really gave a lot of detail which i really liked cause the story could come to life in your head that way.
ReplyDeleteThe aspect of the setting that i felt was best described was when he landed and got off the plain. You used a lot of elements in your writing like when his girlfriend said goodbye you could feel what they felt. "With is heart pumping, beating rapidly, he ran as fast as he could up the dry hill." I thought you really could feel how tired he was and hoe he felt.
This conversation was authentic. the details that made the characters seem real was how you made them speech and gave great details. if the characters dialogue was not believable one thing the you could of done was describing more what they felt and what they were thinking.
i didn't really find anything problematic or distracting i liked your story just the way it is you did a great job on this essay.